Learning Outcome 1:
As I said in my Blog #16, I tend to rely on the same style of revision as I always have:
Outline my main points -> Expand on main points -> Add quotes and citations -> Make sure the first and last sentence of each paragraph correlate -> Make sure that the last sentence from each paragraph relates to the thesis -> Grammar.
This “Road Map” of my revision style really made me realize how much of a creature of habit I am. I didn’t give it much thought until I wrote out how I write, and it is rather insightful. I feel that this way of revising suits me well, but I also should experiment with other ways of editing text. Outside of ENG 110, this process can be applied to lab reports as well, since my style of revision creates a very logical flow of ideas, which is perfect for scientific papers. I can use this “map” of my revision style to proofread, and clarify any essays or writing assignments I have in the future. I used this revision style to revise my third paper, the beauty essay. My “philosophy” when it comes to revising can be summed up in the statement, “If it isn’t broken, don’t fix it.” If my writing flows well, sufficiently outlines my main point, and is understandable to the reader, I don’t mess with it too much.
Learning Outcome 2:
“In 1795, the German dramatist and poet Friedrich Schiller published a book titled On the Aesthetic Education of Man in a Series of Letters. According to Armstrong, “it contains some of our most useful insights into the nature and value of beauty.” Schiller analyses the human condition and hopes to make us understand our delight in what we find beautiful. As Armstrong puts it, “instead of asking which things are beautiful, Schiller is curious about what is going on in us when we respond with this distinctive, intimate thrill and enthusiasm that leads us to say, ‘that’s beautiful’.” He then touches on the fact that different things provoke this response in different people.”
I think that this excerpt from my third essay really exemplifies a good quote sandwich. The first sentence introduces the topic, the second is the quote, and the third explains the quote in more understandable terms. The rest of the paragraph adds a few more ideas and explanations to the overall idea.
Learning Outcome 4:
When I reviewed Jack McKechnie’s essay, What is Beauty?, I pointed out one specific instance where he used an excellent literary tactic. “How can someone become a better person if they cannot even define beauty? The definition of better people is subjective as well as beauty. But does there have to be one form of beauty? I don’t think that people will not define “better people” the same way if they disagree on what beauty means to them.” I explained that by using rhetorical questions at the beginning of paragraphs, and them answering them directly after, he is able to quickly and effectively persuade his reader to accept his point of view.
Learning Outcome 5 & 6:
I think that this snapshot of my Essay 3 works cited page shows my ability to properly cite sources. Using the MLA guidelines, I was able to make sure I was properly citing sources, and making my cited page look as professional as possible. I also was able to easily correct any grammatical errors throughout this essay by simply proofreading my work. I caught several small mistakes doing this.
