If you were to sit in any local school board meeting, you are sure to hear an outcry from parents about how underfunded arts programs are, or how their child’s “intellectual creativity” is being hindered because of the district’s decision to primarily fund the science, technology, engineering, and math-oriented education style. There seems to always be this overarching “idealism” that art is such a vital aspect to children’s proper development and education. The Oxford Dictionary defines art as “The expression or application of human creative skill and imagination, typically in a visual form such as painting or sculpture, producing works to be appreciated primarily for their beauty or emotional power.” The question is, what is art’s proper place in society, and furthermore, does art have a place in STEM education? Art should be kept as a hobby, or a source pleasure, and should certainly not be integrated into STEM education.
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